Image courtesy of Douglas M. MacIlroy
Blaring alarm when the clock strikes 7
Sweeping bristles against the teeth
Pattering water in the shower
Whispering grumble of the car engine
Off-sync drumming of footsteps on the streets
Splattering coffee against the paper cup
Mocking ding of the elevator
Marching keys of the keyboard
Brooming of the printer head
Scraping of the fork against the Chinese take out box
Marching keys of the keyboard
Brooming of the printer head
Freeing ding of the elevator
Whispering sighs of the car engine.
Music of the tiny running footsteps…
Creaking of the front door door…
Heavenly giggles of children…
Laughter…
Home.
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An ode to the ideal tune and rhythm of life.
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What a trip! Good take on the prompt! Nan 🙂
Thanks Nan. It really is a trip, isn’t it? how I wish everybody has that kind of daily redemption.
you got it perfect…it’s a battle that starts from morning but shifts into smooth sailing when heading home. 🙂
That is so true. It is a daily battle. I can only imagine the lightness that one gets from getting that comfort at the end of it.
enjoyed the rhythm. i like your unique take on the prompt and yes, quite a trip– and a lovely destination. 🙂
The destination makes the trip worthwhile, I guess. I’m glad you enjoyed it! 🙂
Dear Francis,
A day in the life…well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thanks, Rochelle!
Beautifully written! I heard every sound. I love how the ding changes from mocking to freeing. You are a talented writer 🙂
Thanks, Jessie! Yes, the first draft included a person in the narrative. But I thought it’d be better if the story will just follow a series of sounds. It’s also noteworthy how a particular sound changes its meaning depending on the timing/context. This is a fun experiment for me so I appreciate your kind words. 🙂
This is lovely! The style of the short clipped sentences got the boringness (is that a word?) of the day across so nicely. And the end – giggles, laughter, home. Cheers!
I’m happy you noticed the length of each sentence. Sounds tend to be fleeting, but it resonates a meaning that lingers. That’s what I was trying to do. And as it culminates in the end, it gets shorter. It gets lighter. 🙂 Cheers!
Good rhythm to this story. Very creative take on the prompt. Well done. 🙂
Thanks, Patricia! I’m glad you liked it. 🙂
Really good. You covered so much with just your few words and really gave the feeling of the release at the end of the day.
janet
Thanks! I really wanted to capture the madness of the day through sounds. So while each sound was cut into lines, there were no punctuations to put them apart. Because everything seems so fast – or even simultaneous. And the only punctuations in it are written as the flow culminates to the day’s cathartic moment.