Friday Fictioneers – Outsider’s Eulogy

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Dear you,

I have always loved you – despite your penchant for the normal.

But that’s not me. Not to say that one is better than the other; it just means we’re different. I remember taking you to that grungy, vandalized street corner. You asked me why. I said there’s beauty and peace in chaos and contempt.

You accepted me; you loved me.

But the polarity between the assuring black and white against the vast gray expanse became overwhelming.

So you said goodbye. And I understand.

There are no heroes and villains; we’re just different.

I’m sorry and thank you,

Me

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I skipped last week’s Friday Fictioneers because

1. I’ve been too busy and more importantly,

2. A friend challenged me to write something happy, which I find very challenging.

But I’ll get back to that image.

This week, I decided to experiment on the structure once again. I hope you will indulge. Some might even debate if this is a short story or not. But isn’t it  why it’s called experimental? It goes against the canon. Nevertheless, I hope you’ll be affected by it.

For more amazing stories on this week’s prompt, please visit this link.

24 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers – Outsider’s Eulogy

  1. I loved this. I would quote back a few of my favourite lines to you, but I fear I’d just repeat back nearly every word. “the polarity between the assuring black and white against the vast gray expanse became overwhelming.” is only one line among many that wowed me. This was excellent, darling.

  2. I think it meets the requirements for a story, and a very good one at that 😉 Many stories deal with the hurt and anger of a breakup, one about acceptance and the recognition that sometimes two people are just too different to be together is a nice change of pace. I especially like the line “There are no heroes or villains; we’re just different.” Excellent work!

  3. It’s definitely a story. 🙂 As for missing a week, real life happens and is generally more important. However, if you’re like the rest of us, I’m sure during that time, writing ideas were either at the fore of your mind or bubbling way in the background. I missed last week myself–family time and travel.

    janet

  4. I agree with Helena, I love a lot of the imagery use, especially the line “the polarity between the assuring black and white against the vast gray expanse became overwhelming.” Despite all good intentions, sometimes the differences are just too insurmountable.

    • Thank you, David. I’m glad you liked it.

      I agree with you. While the motivation might be sincere, the core realities of our being tend to wear down the determination. It’s not right nor wrong. It’s all there is to it. So we process, accept, and move on.

  5. I think it’s good to change the format once and a while. It doesn’t change the fact that it is still flash fiction.
    This could be a love note any of us could have written if we had the words. Thanks for putting it into words.

  6. Nice little narrative here-loved the voice and my fav line was,”There are no heroes and villains; we’re just different.”So true!Great job:-)

  7. I love this (and understand!): But the polarity between the assuring black and white against the vast gray expanse became overwhelming.
    I love this (but don’t agree): There are no heroes and villains; we’re just different.

    Great writing. I shall steal from you what is behind this. Ann

  8. The pace and structure works well. I like the repetition and the short sentences at the beginning and end surrounding longer paragraphs in the middle – this creates a wonderful and satisfying rhythm. Well done!

    • Hi Jessie, I rarely get to visit my wordpress account so it’s only today that I saw your comments. Thank you for your kind words. I am glad that you liked it. And thank you for sharing your insights on the technical aspect of my writing. Cheers! 🙂

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